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Well, well, not too much to say here. Solidly-written all the way, the scenes gel nicely and it all reads as smoothly as you like. The ...


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Another great piece of work, filled with some intriguing elements. The dream sequence was suitably disturbing and intense, with just t...


And as the new year begins, I kick it off in just the right fashion - by plunging into one of the best ME fics around. Right away, I'm...


An interesting take on the Blitz. I must admit, the way the games spoke of Elysium they made it sound like a one-man (or woman) Alamo, ...

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*mothbanquet
Moth/Moff/Grand Moff/Moffles
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My name is Mothbanquet, pro author and creator of Mass Effect fan fiction for nearly three years. I pride myself on writing good quality Mass Effect fiction, both original and canon, as well as offering advice and critique to other writers in the community. I have released two full-length stories so far, Mass Effect 2: Dark Rendition, a gritty and emotionally complex retelling of Shepard and Tali's romance, and Interceptor, a riveting espionage thriller set months before the first game. There are two more projects in the works, the details of which will continue to be posted in my journal entries.

I believe in a few simple things; quality writing, deep characters and well-constructed plot lines. I do not write fluff or fan-pleasers. Instead, I try to bring something new and fresh to the Mass Effect audience, something they will enjoy and always remember.

Thank you for visiting my page and remember to check in often - content is updated every Monday and blogs/journals every Friday.

Keelah se'lai!
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"Some books, films, TV series, etc have been criticized because the protagonist is seen by an audience as someone they "can't get behind". Audiences like that need a "hero" to support, otherwise they cannot enjoy or appreciate the story." - ~CMY187

The above fellow and I were having a little chat about the natures and concepts of heroes, anti-heroes, villains, etc etc, and I thought this might be a good topic of discussion. The above quote in particular is an interesting one, and brought to mind my experience in reading *abstract1106's ME fic The One That Got Away. This is a fantastic story (and one that has just capped off at Chapter 25, so this is a good opportunity to read it through while you can) with many rich characters but - and the author is aware of this - I simply dislike her Commander Shepard.

Let me be absolutely clear - I do like the way she's portrayed, the way she has developed, I like the way she has been written every step of the way. But as opposed to the author's James Vega, of whom I can't get enough, her Shepard is abrasive, spiteful, rough-mannered and generally not really all that nice. Again, I love that such a person has been given the role of joint-main protagonist. But given the choice, I'd rather share an elevator with a pack of starved rottweilers.

So I've been thinking - is likeability an essential trait for a protagonist? Does the protagonists' good actions excuse their flawed personalities in your eyes? Or does their likeable personality excuse any foul deeds they commit, in an anti-hero's case?

I'd like to hear your opinions on the subject.

Well, those are my current thoughts. For those interested, I'll soon have a new slice of original fiction up in the shape of Eternal Empire: Legends - Part Three, and the new chapter of ME: Dark Saga is underway and hopefully should be complete by next week. Of course, there is the matter of my writing laptop being put temporarily (fingers crossed) OOA so may we all pray to the gods that it is fixed soon...
  • Listening to: Assorted
  • Reading: The Iliad
  • Watching: Family Guy
  • Playing: Star Wars: The Old Republic/Rome Total War
  • Eating: Spaghetti
  • Drinking: Coffee

Ongoing Poll - What is YOUR Shepard's origin story? 

23%
7 deviants said Spacer/War Hero
16%
5 deviants said Earthborn/Survivor
13%
4 deviants said Colonist/Survivor
13%
4 deviants said Colonist/Ruthless
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4 deviants said Spacer/Survivor
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3 deviants said Colonist/War Hero
6%
2 deviants said Earthborn/War Hero
6%
2 deviants said Earthborn/Ruthless
0%
No deviants said Spacer/Ruthless

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*mothbanquet:iconmothbanquet:
They don't write reviews like this anymore... [link]
Thu May 9, 2013, 9:17 AM
*nomibubs:iconnomibubs:
Happy Birthday! :D
Sun Apr 21, 2013, 6:44 AM
*mothbanquet:iconmothbanquet:
Whoa... Just hit me how many people's Shepards have the same origins as mine.
Thu Mar 7, 2013, 11:14 PM
*mothbanquet:iconmothbanquet:
And he's also learned you can't put in links in shoutbox like you can in regular comments!
Sat Mar 2, 2013, 2:16 AM
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Yours truly has been <a href="[link]"interviewed in SFH!
Sat Mar 2, 2013, 2:15 AM
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*blackcherryangel Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Happy Birthday! :iconcakeplz:
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*mothbanquet Apr 22, 2013  Professional Writer
Aw, thanks so much! :D
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*catelee2u Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Happy Birthday!! :party::iconchampagneplz::iconyummycakeplz:
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*mothbanquet Apr 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you so much! :)
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Mood: Joy *Ezri-Krios Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Happy Birthday hun! :hug: Hope you're having an awesome day. :party:
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*mothbanquet Apr 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Aw thanks mate! :D
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Mood: Welcoming ~ChaosShadoWolfe Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I've been reading Interceptor for the past... month or so? and I absolute have to say that I can't possibly deny that I'm amazed that you're not known through official channels, or hired by Bioware for that matter.

Comparing the two of us... if I'd say we're equals, I'd probably offend you, that you're extremely skilled is a fact. I've been watching a couple of skilled writers, authors etc, and I have yet to find an author that didn't learn me something. What you've learned me is that an author should be able to write within a fixed time-frame, fixed setting and with little room to create when it comes to the universe. I have yet to learn this, but everything in due time.

I probably shouldn't dwell longer than necessary... I'm an original author, I write stuff that bubbles up in my mind, and sometimes it's a fanfiction but most of the time I write original stories, stories I create from the ground up and that I'm intrigued with books and stories comes as little surprise to me. I've recently been rejected at a game studio(Guerrilla Games, creator of Killzone) due to my inexperience with the industry, which is rather a shame. However, I would like to ask, since you're a good author and proof is there to see in your gallery(I can't even get close to explaining how beautiful your stories are), would you like to "judge", criticize, review any of my continued stories, my prose, namely my recent two called "Drenched in Blood" and "Huntsman of Night".

If you don't want this, I can understand since it's a decent amount of reading and I think it's slightly better than rubbish on my part(everyone disagrees so far, I want an honest and true opinion from someone who knows the trade better than myself). I just wanted to inform you that I'm watching you directly from this point on, and that I'm reading your canon or Fan fiction(What's the difference?) and I'm proud that you're in our community.
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*mothbanquet Mar 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Well, thank you for the kind praise! Yes, you're not the first to say that Interceptor wouldn't look out of place next to the printed novels and to be honest, I never really get tired of hearing it! :D


As far as the official channels go, I'm working on that as we speak with the writing of my novel and the recent establishment of my official (if, so far, threadbare) blog and online profile. I wouldn't say I know the trade particularly well, or at all for that matter, but I intend to find out about it piece by piece. I've got some good people behind me, a strong story to write and room for much, much more.


One thing I've learned recently is beware of the games industry if you value your creativity. I love Mass Effect, but I weep for its original creator, who has seen his universe change from its original vision into something more exploitive and shallow thanks to the 'profits-first' attitude of BioWare and EA. I would also heed the lesson of Karen Traviss, the author of the fantastic Star Wars: Republic Commando series of books, who found all her wonderful characters and lore rendered obsolete in one fell swoop with the release of the Clone Wars kids' show/movie.

I think it's a real shame as games have become, in many ways, the ultimate form of interactive entertainment, able to render lore, characters and worlds with unfaltering faithfulness. Unfortunately, few publishers these days will allow the time needed to really create something worthy of the author's imagination. I adore Killzone's universe and design but many storytelling shortcuts were taken throughout the series for the sake of action. It is a shooter of course, but I don't see many FPS creators bucking the trend. In fact, considering Mass Effect's direction, even RPGs are falling into that same trap.


But anyway, to your request - I would certainly have no problem with providing critique on any individual pieces. Unfortunately I can't really spare the time to get into entire series' at the moment but if you can send me a note with what you consider to be your best piece of work, I will offer all the advice I can at some point this week.

Oh, and thanks kindly for the watch! :D
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~Sniper0092 Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hi.
Could you give me a critique on one of my things? Thanks.
Nice art btw.
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*mothbanquet Mar 11, 2013  Professional Writer
I'm sure I can manage that. Just send me a note with a link to what you'd like me to review and I'll get round to it at some point this week. Please bear in mind that I only review prose, thanks.
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